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Post by djlamar2 on Jan 4, 2011 20:21:52 GMT -8
Ooh. You're probably wondering "The darkness within. Sounds cool" Oh yeah. This story is about a pony who comes to Ponyland. (Separate story again. Sorry but I just came up with the idea) Magic Star has a faint feeling that something is wrong with this pony but she can't put her finger on it. So our story begins with a look at the past. The past of this mysterious pony:
Voice one: What should we do with her? She causes nothing but trouble for us.
Voice two: I don't know. Its not her fault a demon is in her.
Voice three: Still I don't like that it is in her.
Pony: Please don't banish me.
Voice one: Silence! You have no say in this. You are a monster.
Pony: No. No I can control it. See. *Her tail turns dark red* Oh boy.
Voice one: That's it. Although its against good will to banish a pony like her. I hereby banish Comet Rider forever from this realm. It is final. Anyone disagree?
Voice two: No. Sorry honey.
Comet Rider: But mom.
Voice 3: Listen to your mom. Till you can control this demon you are hereby banished from this place.
Comet Rider: Elder please. *She turns her back on Comet Rider* The witches did this to me. Please.
Elder: I am sorry Comet Rider but my word is final.
Comet Rider: But I'm your granddaughter. You can't banish your own granddaughter can you?
Elder: Sorry. Although it pains me to say this. You are no longer my granddaughter.
Comet Rider: No!!!!!!!!!!
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Post by djlamar2 on Jan 5, 2011 16:08:20 GMT -8
in the present:
Magic Star: Wow.
Megan: So that's what it says?
Magic Star: Yeah. It says "She was banished five years ago from the royal crystal palace".
Megan: And all this because the witches put a demon in her. And you say you may have seen her before?
Magic Star: I know I have. *Voices are heard outside*
Lickety-Split: There she is.
Ribbon: Yeah. *Megan looks out and sees a pony with a hood*
Megan: Is that her?
Magic Star: We think so. She wears a robe Megan.
Megan: So? That doesn't make her suspicious.
Magic Star: There's a strange aura around her though.
Megan: Still. *Goes out* You look cold. Wanna come in?
Magic Star: Megan.
Megan: Come on Magic Star. She seems fine to me.
Pony: I don't want to be a bother.
Megan: No bother at all. *The pony collapses* Someone help. Don't just stand there. Help me get her in. *They all nod knowing that even if it was her they couldn't let her just lay there*
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Post by djlamar2 on Jan 16, 2011 15:49:13 GMT -8
Megan: Someone call a doctor. She's pregnant. And its time. Ma'am.
Pony: Help me. *In her unconcious state* Demon trying to kill my baby.
Megan: You heard her. Help me. *Lickety-Split calls 911*
Lickety-Split: It is her. We should just let her baby die.
Megan: Lickety-Split. I'm surprised at you. What if someone said that about your daughter huh? Huh?!
Lickety-Split: Sorry.
Megan: *Sighs* Gonna have to do emergency C-section. If we don't the baby or the mom could die. Somebody get me a knife something to bite on and a towel. We have no anisthesia so she needs something to bite down on to help with the pain.
Heartthrob: Poor darling. I'll go get my sewing needle and some thread.
Megan: Got it. *They get all the stuff they need* O.K. Listen. Comet Rider right? *She nods* I want you to bite down on this. *Looks at the supplies* A teething ring?
Baby Cuddles: It'll help right?
Megan: What a sweetie. You all should learn a lesson from her. *Puts the teething ring in Comet Rider's mouth* Bite down now. I hope this helps. I hope all my college studies help too. *Cuts her open and she screams* O.K just hold on. *She reaches in* I feel the baby. *Pulls out a baby unicorn but she looks different* A red tail?
Magic Star: Just like in the story. The demon must have given the power to her baby. *It opens its eyes and they are green* Yikes.
Megan: Whoa. Need to close Comet Rider up. *She looks over and her breathing has stopped* Oh no. The demon killed her instead. *Laughter can be heard from the newborn*
Baby Pony: Heheheheh. That's right Megan. I killed her mom at the last minute just as you pulled the baby from the womb. So young and so...... underpowered.
Megan: Get out of her. I mean it demon!
Demon: Heheheh. The only people who can banish me are the witches. And I doubt they will even help.
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Post by battlefield on Jan 16, 2011 17:24:13 GMT -8
Sure is a gripping story. I'm hooked.
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Post by djlamar2 on Jan 16, 2011 20:41:25 GMT -8
Megan: Bring her along. To the volcano of gloom. And bind her up. We don't want that demon killing anyone.
Lickety-Split: I say we kill the baby and be rid of that demon forever.
Megan: No! Its not her fault that demon is in her.
Lickety-Split: Then its her mom's fault. She shouldn't have let the witches get a hold of her.
Megan: Listen to you. The story plainly says "Its not my fault" correct?
Magic Star: That it does.
Lickety-Split: Alright but if she escapes and she loses control we kill her.
Megan: Only if we can't change her back. Please. *They nod*
Magic Star: But you are responsible for this little bundle of joy got it?
Megan: Yes Magic Star. I understand. *The unicorn's baby self takes over and she turns back into a baby unicorn with a regular tail* Aw. She must have...... *She starts crying and Ponyland shakes*
Windwhistler: Mmmmmmaaaaaaakkkkkeeeeee heeerrrrrrrrrr stttttooooppppppppppp!!
Megan: Are you hungry little one? *The unicorn nods* O.K. Bottle bottle. Anyone have a bottle?
Baby Heartthrob: Right here Megan. Filled with fresh warm milk. Here.
Lickety-Split: Hmm. *Looks down at her* You know what. *Giggles* She's kind of cute when she's not a demon. Let's just keep her from crying and we'll be fine.
Megan: Right. *Puts the bottle to the baby and she takes it and falls asleep* Aw.
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Post by djlamar2 on Jan 17, 2011 10:45:57 GMT -8
On the way they start smelling something:
Magic Star: Baby Heartthrob.
Baby Heartthrob: Wasn't me Magic Star.
Magic Star: O.K who laid a stink bomb. *Looks at the baby ponies that came with them and they shake their heads* And it can't be the older babies their potty trained. *The newborn starts crying again* Whaaaaatttttttt'ssssss wrrrronnnnnggggg nooooowwwwwww?
Megan: Ugh. I think I know. *Sniffs* Ew. Yep its definitely her.
Magic Star: Then change her before she tears Ponyland to shreds with her crying. *Megan does but it still doesn't help. She's still crying* Now what?
Megan: Maybe she's gassy? *Picks her up and starts burping her* Come on. Come on burp for aunt Megan. *With the loudest burp anyone has ever heard the baby burps and the crying stops and suddenly she starts cooing* Aw.
Windwhistler: Well that solves that. *Megan lays her back down in a carriage they brought but she starts crying again* Jeeeeeezzzzzzzzz. What is the deal with this unicorn?
Megan: I don't know. *Picks her up again and she stops crying* Wait a minute. When I hold her she's fine. But when I lay her down she starts crying. *Giggles* She thinks I'm her mommy.
Magic Star: It is true the first thing a baby sees that they think is their mommy. *They look at her and she's light blue now* Hey just like her mom.
Megan: Then I have the perfect name for her. Baby Comet Rider. *They arrive at the Volcano of Gloom* Hydia!
Hydia: Stupid girl what are you doing here?
Megan: Come down here and say that to my face. I'm mad Hydia. *She comes down* Look at this unicorn.
Hydia: Ugh she's cute.
Megan: *Grabbing her by her blouse* Now listen Hydia and listen well! Why did you put a demon in her mom?
Hydia: A demon? What are you talking about? I don't know this baby.
Megan: Maybe this will ring a bell. Comet Rider. *Hydia gasps*
Hydia: Cooommmmetttttt Rrrrrriiiiiddddderrrr? *Stuttering* She's that unicorn he told me to let him possess.
Megan: Who?! Who did Hydia? Tell me or I'll..... I'll make you eat cake.
Hydia: Anything but that. Kill me, banish me. But don't make me eat cake. *Megan remembers that the witches hate ice cream or cake or anything beautiful*
Megan: I'm serious. Oh Cupcake.
Cupcake: I have made a delicious cake. Want some Hydia. *Starts eating a piece* Mm. So good.
Hydia: Stop it or I'll...... *Sighs* Fine. Twenty years ago a demon came to the volcano. He said "Find me a suitable body to possess or else this volcano will be no more." So I found a unicorn. She was horribly beautiful. So I wanted the demon to possess her. But what about her now?
Megan: She's dead dammit. D. e. a. d. Dead. The demon killed her.
Hydia: And the demon?
Megan: In the baby.
Hydia: I was afraid of that. *Sighs* The demon knew that she wasn't gonna be able to handle him so her killed her I assume. *Megan nods* There is one hope. The demon can be killed two ways. One kill the one being possessed by him. Thus killing the demon.
Megan: Not a choice Hydia. What's the other option?
Hydia: Two go to the black mountains and find a way to reverse it. But I warn you. Kill her now or she'll kill you.
Megan: She thinks of me as her mom. No way am I gonna kill her. Let's go. *They head off*
Hydia: Its your funeral then. *Cackles*
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Post by raibowdash12 on Jan 17, 2011 13:46:34 GMT -8
wow you worked pretty hard didn't you?
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Post by djlamar2 on Jan 17, 2011 14:20:38 GMT -8
yep thanks.
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Post by raibowdash12 on Jan 17, 2011 14:23:15 GMT -8
well in that case you're one of the best fanfictuers ever or whatever that's called! GREAT JOB!
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Post by djlamar2 on Jan 18, 2011 6:12:37 GMT -8
Megan: The Black Mountains. *Laughter is heard again*
Demon: So that witch Hydia told you how to get rid of me eh?
Megan: *Looking down* Oh boy.
Demon: Thanks for the milk and the change. I'm all....... Urgh. Stupid baby unicorn.
Megan: That's right. She must remember I'm like a mother to her. *Just then another voice is heard. Its the newborn*
Baby Comet Rider: Demon or no demon. You're not gonna hurt my mommy. She might be a human but she helped my mom have me.
Demon: You'd better get back down in the darkness where you belong. *The unicorn turns completely red* Perfect.
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Post by djlamar2 on Jan 19, 2011 11:33:57 GMT -8
They arrive at a palace:
Megan: Maybe they know. *Knocks on the door and a light blue unicorn is seen*
Unicorn: Hello. *Looks at the baby unicorn and gasps* The demon. Its made its way back here. But princess Comet Rider. Either she has gotten smaller or this is her baby.
Megan: Ma'am calm down. This is her baby. She died giving birth to this baby because of the demon in her. I'm Megan.
Unicorn: I am Comet Blast. Comet Rider's mother. Please please come in. *They do* I knew it was a mistake to banish her. I said before we made the decision "What if she has a baby? What then?" Did they listen? No.
Megan: But you agreed.
Comet Blast: Yes I did. I did agree she needed to go somewhere and find out how to get rid of the demon. Unfortunately it looks like she couldn't and now my granddaughter is gripped with the same fate. My husband and father-in-law are gone. Only I remain. So Megan was it?
Megan: Yes.
Comet Blast: Why have you come here with this demon unicorn?
Megan: The witches sent me here. They said that to get rid of this demon was to come here to the Black Mountains.
Comet Blast: Its true. The answer is here in the Black Mountains but the road ahead is dangerous. Megan listen to me. If you want you can kill the newborn. I won't hold it against you.
Megan: Why is everyone suggesting I kill her? Its not her fault this demon is in her. Argh. And it wasn't her mom's either.
Comet Blast: I know. Sorry I suggested it.
Megan: Its O.K.
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Post by djlamar2 on Jan 20, 2011 21:15:44 GMT -8
Comet Blast: Now listen Megan. Up ahead is a shrine. There is an elder. He'll tell you how you can get rid of that demon. Megan now listen this baby may think of you as her mother now.
Megan: How did you know that?
Comet Blast: The whole time you've been here she's held onto you and has not let go of you.
Megan: She does doesn't she?
Comet Blast: In that case I think we shouldn't kill her.
Megan: She even said something.
Comet Blast: Telekenesis. She might not have a horn but she can tell you things. Or say stuff.
Megan: She said something to the demon. She didn't want him to hurt her mommy. Which is now me.
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Post by djlamar2 on Jan 24, 2011 11:12:31 GMT -8
Comet Blast: Megan listen carefully. Up ahead is a magician. He'll tell you how to get to a shrine. There you can banish the demon. And Megan my time here is short I'm afraid. See I am 95 years old and it won't be long before I die. So if you make it back before then I wanna hold my granddaughter.
Megan: I promise. *She heads out* We need to see a magician.
Magic Star: Got it. *They head toward a house and there stands an old unicorn* Excuse us.
Unicorn: Eh. A human and another unicorn?
Megan: Excuse us but we need to know how to banish a demon. Are you the magician we heard about?
Unicorn: Yes. I am Merlock. Let me see the possessed one. *She hands over Baby Comet Rider* Ooh. The Red Dragon demon. This is a special demon. Can't be banished by any normal banishing spell. *Shows himself as a light green unicorn* Now listen. Up ahead is a shrine. *Pointing toward a stone palace* There inside you will find a dagger. Use it.
Megan: Kill the baby?
Merlock: I am afraid its the only way.
Baby Comet Rider: Don't worry mama. I won't hold it against you. *Megan starts crying* Why you crying mama?
Megan: I don't want to kill you. But if I must I must. *They head in the direction of where Merlock is pointing and they see the shrine* There it is.
Magic Star: You want us to come with you?
Megan: No.
Windwhistler: But we want to be there to hold you when you kill her.
Megan: No its fine. Just stay outside and be ready to hold me. *She goes inside* Baby Comet Rider I never knew you very long. Baby Comet Rider sorry I wasn't able to save you or your mom.
Baby Comet Rider: It O.K. Megan. *She sets the unicorn on the table and straps her down* Hug me before you kill me please.
Megan: Of course. *She does and gets back up* Now then. *Picks up the dagger and it glows* It must be a magical dagger. *Holds it up and in a loud voice she screams* Demon be gone! *The unicorn closes her eyes and cries*
Baby Comet Rider: Is it over? Am I dead? *She opens her eyes and there was Megan with the dagger aimed at the unicorn's heart area* Do it now Megan.
Megan: *Crying* I can't. I love you too much. It would hurt too much to kill you. *A teardrop hits Baby Comet Rider and the demon screams*
Red Dragon Demon: I can't stand this love. Stop it. STOP IT!
Baby Comet Rider: I love you too Megan. *The demon screams again*
Red Dragon Demon: No! My weakness. Too much love. Tooooooo muuuuucccccchhhhhhhhh love. *He leaves the unicorn and lays on the ground* Hm. I'll kill you both.
Baby Comet Rider: Now Megan. Strike him while he's weak.
Megan: I'll say it again demon. DEMON BE GONE! *Strikes the demon with the dagger and it screams and explodes* Its done. *Baby Comet Rider starts crying* Sh sh its O.k. He will no longer be bothering you.
Baby Comet Rider: Thanks Megan. I *Baby babble*.
Megan: What?
Baby Comet Rider: I wove you Megan. *Transforms back into her Light blue unicorn self*
Megan: I love you too Baby Comet Rider.
Stay tuned for the final part.
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Post by djlamar2 on Jan 24, 2011 11:36:24 GMT -8
Now the final part:
Outside the ponies see a flash of light:
Magic Star: She did it. *They see Megan coming out with a baby unicorn* She didn't do it. Run.
Windwhistler: Wait. *Goes over and looks at the baby unicorn* The demon its gone.
Megan: Yes we killed it. *Merlock walks up*
Merlock: Yes. It was your love for her and her love for you that was the demon's weakness. I knew you wouldn't kill her but would do anything to get rid of the demon even risking your life to save hers.
Megan: Really?
Merlock: Yep. Now she is your daughter. *Megan smiles and they head back to the palace*
Megan: Comet Blast.
Comet Blast: Your back. And you have relieved the little one of her demon. Let me see her. *She holds her hooves out and Megan hands the baby to her* The last of our clan. May she bring happiness wherever she goes. *Closes her eyes*
Megan: Comet Blast? *Goes over and feels her neck for a pulse* She's dead.
Magic Star: Yep. *They head back to Paradise Estate and Comet Rider's ghost is seen*
Comet Rider: You have saved my daughter Megan. Thank you.
Megan: Your welcome.
Comet Rider: Now she can live a happy life. Goodbye my sweet child. *The voice echoes and the screen turns black and a light blue unicorn can be seen looking at an album with a younger unicorn*
Unicorn: And that's what happened honey.
Baby unicorn: Aw come on mom. Your pulling my leg again. See ya.
Unicorn: If only Baby Comet Blast knew. *Looks at the album* Thank you Megan for saving me. *Another baby unicorn comes in*
Baby unicorn: Mama Megan's coming. *She heads out and above the door reads "Comet Rider's new home"*
Thus ends my "The darkness within story" See you next time.
The end.
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