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Post by sunstar on Jan 21, 2012 15:20:50 GMT -8
A few little mistakes.
Megan pulls Flutterbyes legs off? So, we have a two legged pony walking around now? Fizzy says they can't hear a world. Should that be word?
Other then that, it was really good. My guess for villian is Grogar.
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Post by Al1701 on Jan 21, 2012 15:29:23 GMT -8
*headdesk*
I'll have to edit that. I'm going to editing everything after the last part of Cold War is done, but I'll make those edits ASAP.
Any thoughts on the story itself?
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Post by Al1701 on Jan 24, 2012 19:43:49 GMT -8
Part 5 is done and boy was it long. I actually extended part 4 to make it a little more reasonable. I might be making even more tweaks to these last two parts.
Time for some editing. I'm cleaning up all five parts. Then I might take a break from the project to work on something else.
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Post by Al1701 on Jan 29, 2012 17:10:54 GMT -8
At last, the heart pounding conclusion to Cold War. I've also made edits to the other parts. Nothing too significant. 1x05: Cold War Part 5I might be taking a break from this project to pursue other things. I've also changed the episode lineup a little. Enjoy and tell me what you think.
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Post by weirdraptor on Jan 30, 2012 15:18:43 GMT -8
Having one of the character go "previously on My Little Pony Legends" reminds me of Gargoyles. Nicely done. I don't have too much say other than keep up the good work.
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Post by Al1701 on Jan 30, 2012 17:16:12 GMT -8
I was considering Wind Whistler, but I thought Majesty would be better. I even thought of starting with her mirror instead of just a black screen.
With Cold War done, I'm going to standalone episodes, so the previous episode blurb won't be making a reappearance for a while. Instead, we're going to have some fun with Flutterbye's arachnophobia.
I should probably mention my sister is a real basket case around spiders and much of Flutterbye's antics will be inspired by some of the real experiences I had living with her the little eight-legged critters. I'm evil.
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Post by sunstar on Jan 30, 2012 19:14:12 GMT -8
Its all really good!
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Post by firehooves on Jan 31, 2012 9:29:42 GMT -8
I do think the episodes would benefit if you took the transformers animated approach to guest stars; balacing development between them and the mane cast. And don't spend too much time on earth with Megan... at least that's what I think. Oh! and will ponyland's native human population show up?
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Post by Al1701 on Jan 31, 2012 14:47:51 GMT -8
Usually, what I showcase of Megan's life on her side of the rainbow is to set up events regarding her on the ponies' side. I want to develop her character as more believable than the ponies' mother like in the original cartoon.
As for other humans, they will be rare. The Moochick will be moving in and a few others will show up.
I do plan for episodes with guest characters to serve as development pieces for the main characters as well.
I think it's safe to put up the last episodes of Season 1.
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Post by Al1701 on Feb 6, 2012 2:02:06 GMT -8
Well, I guess I didn't go on a break just yet. Here's the first episode after Cold War. 1x06: Flutter PhobiaI hope you guys love reading it as much as I loved writing. Feedback is also welcome. Also, I made some alterations to the beginning of the previous episode montages of cold war. I'd like to know what you think of it too.
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Post by sunstar on Feb 6, 2012 14:42:45 GMT -8
I'm terrified of spiders myself. I deal with it by sending a cat after the spider. I loved this!
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Post by firehooves on Feb 11, 2012 14:01:35 GMT -8
Nice episode! I like the writing and characters, especipecially gusty! 'Spdierphobia', lol! Not bad for a slice of life episode!
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Post by Al1701 on Feb 11, 2012 14:36:13 GMT -8
Thanks. This episode was fun to write. I also finally got my The Fly reference in.
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Post by firehooves on Feb 19, 2012 9:27:01 GMT -8
One thing I'd like to see carry over from original G1, if you use Levan as a villian, bring in the princess ponies and thier wandsa as what's he's after. Just get rid of those stupid damosel hats with the streamers they wear. ><
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Post by Al1701 on Feb 19, 2012 9:51:38 GMT -8
One thing I'd like to see carry over from original G1, if you use Levan as a villian, bring in the princess ponies and thier wandsa as what's he's after. Just get rid of those stupid damosel hats with the streamers they wear. >< The Princess Ponies won't be appearing in this season. Majesty's only descendants are Windy and a currently (probably permanently) unnamed stallion. Also leadership isn't hereditary, so the title of prince and princess have little meaning to the Dream Valley ponies. Lavan only intends to annihilate the ice orcs and will destroy the planet to do it if he has to. However, I do have plans for the Princess Ponies at a much later date when I introduce other pony factions (including the pony equivalent to Decepticons.) I also plan on using their British names and dragon attendants.
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