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Post by weirdraptor on Apr 14, 2012 11:50:13 GMT -8
The beginning reminds me of a CMC episode of FIM. Not bad. Your Little Lickitysplit is even your own Diamond Tiara. So there's going to be a run for class prez, eh.
Nice touch bringing in the fact that Megan and her sibs have lives outside of the ponies once again.
Overall, really good as usual. I'll have more to say in a bit, but I did read and enjoy the whole thing.
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Post by firehooves on Apr 14, 2012 16:19:29 GMT -8
Nice chapter. I do like how baby lickety split is a spoiled brata- it kinda fits with her brat personality in the movie, until she learned her lesson. I did the same thing with Baby north Star in my fics.
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Post by Al1701 on Apr 14, 2012 16:28:09 GMT -8
I'm glad you liked my take on Little Lickety-Split. She is the Phenomenal Fillies answer to Diamond Tiara. She's not from a particularly rich family, but she's still a little brat who believes the world revolves around her.
What did you think of Gusty's character development in this?
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Post by firehooves on Apr 15, 2012 8:32:09 GMT -8
She seems too have lost a bit too much of brashness, but baby gusty is still smart aleck-y I also saw you used my idea for sundance being a teacher
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Post by Al1701 on Apr 15, 2012 9:05:32 GMT -8
Don't worry. Gusty's still got plenty of brashness when it's time to be brash. However, she does have a softer side and some vulnerabilities.
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Post by Al1701 on Apr 18, 2012 5:05:55 GMT -8
I already finished writing episode 12. It really wrote itself. I just have to edit and I'll post it.
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Post by sunstar on Apr 18, 2012 14:35:43 GMT -8
Page 6 is unreadable. It's there, but its really blurry. Also, add in the word help in the end when Gusty and Little Gusty are talking. Otherwise, the story was good! CMC of G1!
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Post by Al1701 on Apr 18, 2012 16:00:16 GMT -8
Page 6 worked for me. You just have to wait for a second for it to clear up. I'll edit that conversation. Meanwhile, I got the next episode ready. Enjoy. 1x12: Bushwoolies
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Post by sunstar on Apr 20, 2012 11:45:37 GMT -8
Other then a few grammar errors, it was good!
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Post by Al1701 on Apr 20, 2012 14:55:16 GMT -8
What are those grammatical errors? I'm ready to go in and edit.
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Post by Al1701 on Apr 22, 2012 11:30:40 GMT -8
Here it is, the mid-season climax. Enjoy, and tell me what you think. 1x13: Megan the Weather WitchI'm going to take a month or two off to work on other project. Besides, my idea of how the series would work is the first 13 episodes would air and then repeat before the second half.
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Post by weirdraptor on Apr 22, 2012 15:47:08 GMT -8
Wow. You really did cut off the plot of the movie at the knees. Loved the scene at the beginning with Sparkler and Ah, yes, the important question for any junior high student. Personally, I was the "leave me the hell alone" kid. All my friends were kids I hung out with were outside of school. Heh, which is basically Megan's situation, but with a ponies that live to the bicentennial. So, Admiral Ackbar, what were your thoughts on Ara? I knew it was only going to get worse when Meg suddenly stoped the tornado. Overall, it's a really good. Loved the cliffhanger at the end.
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Post by sunstar on Apr 23, 2012 13:04:30 GMT -8
Need more!
Just don't do what Capcom did and make us wait five months before airing the last four episodes of Megaman NT Warrior.
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Post by Al1701 on Apr 23, 2012 15:46:41 GMT -8
I'll probably pick it back up at the beginning of June. It's just to give the sense the first half of the season would end on a cliffhanger then a break, then back for the second half.
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Post by sunstar on Apr 25, 2012 18:33:14 GMT -8
Good. Capcom gave us a really bad cliffhanger. I can't wait!
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