Al1701
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Post by Al1701 on Apr 26, 2012 14:30:35 GMT -8
I hope the second part will meet with your approvals.
What do you people think of my portrayal of Megan so far?
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Post by firehooves on Apr 28, 2012 15:45:38 GMT -8
Megan feels like a real girl instead of a mary sue/dues ex machina, along with her siblings. The writers seemed to forget she was a twelve year old girl, and not a female rambo XD
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Al1701
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Post by Al1701 on Apr 28, 2012 16:13:12 GMT -8
Well, she's sixteen here, but same idea.
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Post by Al1701 on Apr 30, 2012 3:38:52 GMT -8
Given some canon material that has come to my attention, I've made some edits.
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Post by Al1701 on May 2, 2012 3:09:55 GMT -8
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Post by sunstar on May 2, 2012 10:52:38 GMT -8
I loved reading every second of it! Two small mistakes. Rhino with a head cloud? I think cold will work better here, and you have Megan instead of Daniel talking to Altas at one point.
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Post by Al1701 on May 2, 2012 11:12:58 GMT -8
Thanks. I fixed the character confusion. I'm keeping it head cold, because there is also chest colds, and it's just Daniel talking to himself.
Any parts you loved in particular?
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Post by sunstar on May 2, 2012 20:05:37 GMT -8
loved Majesty's arrival and Tootise fighting Eureka.
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Post by sunstar on May 4, 2012 18:57:26 GMT -8
What program do you use to write it in?
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Al1701
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Post by Al1701 on May 5, 2012 1:23:50 GMT -8
Celtx. It's a program designed specifically for scriptwriting.
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Post by weirdraptor on May 5, 2012 11:13:01 GMT -8
Loved it! Daniel took meeting Atlas is stride. I see you're gearing up for the ice orcs and fire demons. You're very smoothly interconnecting these plots and causing them to have side effects that impacting events elsewhere. Have you considering writing for Greg Weisman or Bruce Timm?
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Post by sunstar on May 5, 2012 11:39:03 GMT -8
Thanks! I've been thinking about cleaning up TF: Ponyfied.
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Post by Al1701 on May 5, 2012 12:15:20 GMT -8
Thanks! I've been thinking about cleaning up TF: Ponyfied. I found the free version last year which is what I'm using. Thank you for saying I'm doing a good job of interconnecting plots. I'm glad it looks good. Some others have suggested trying to get into the writing world elsewhere. Though, I feel a little uncomfortable just inserting myself into story with already well established rules, some of which I don't even know. There's also the fan factor. After seeing the shitstorm thrown at Merriwether Williams over Mysterious Mare Do Well, I'm kind of fear fans erupting because my take on a character or situation isn't theirs. I have an extreme intolerance for Karma Houdinis for example. If someone is being an asshole, I don't care how much of a fan favorite they are or the excuses made for them, want them to get their appropriate comeuppance in the end. I'd do it just for a laugh if nothing else. A good example is I seem to be the only one who had a really negative reaction to Rainbow Dash's treatment of Thunderlanes in Hurricane Fluttershy. Most saw her knuckling down on a lazy team member while I saw her ignoring the possible plight of a member of her team in favor of her own self interest of showing up Fillydelphia. If I wrote an episode of Friendship is Magic where Rainbow Dash gets reprimanded or otherwise criticized for her poor leadership in that situation, fans would probably burn me in Effigy which is a small town in New York. Though, you have to start out somewhere. Although I would like to start on a show starting out, I doubt they would bring in novices at that point. It would be a treat to work for people like Weisman and Timm. Along with the likes of JMS, I loved their work. Back to the story. Did anyone think I went too dark with Majesty threatening to have Flashback scan Ara's mind? And what do people think of me making the ire orcs and lava demons mutually antagonistic?
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Post by weirdraptor on May 5, 2012 12:27:04 GMT -8
No. I felt that the threat was warranted. Eh, I'll have to see how you develop the situation before with the orcs and demons before I can really say anything too much on it.
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Post by Al1701 on May 5, 2012 16:12:05 GMT -8
That's not going to come until the finale. Until then, more slice of life. With the world basically established the way I want, it's time to work more on the characters of the main 6 and their relationships.
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