The 5 ponies you meet in heaven

[djlamar2]

I have had inspiration again to make another story based off another great book. Entitled: The 5 people you meet in heaven. I just finished it. I'm gonna change a few things but not many. Again it'll be short because if I do as long as the author did I'll be doing this for awhile. The only things I won't change are: How the pony died (Person that is in the book), the ending and the 5 people that pony meets. Anyway as always the characters are gonna be as follows: Eddie is a blue unicorn. The little girl he tries to save is a green earth pony. The 5 ponies are as follows: The first is a blue pegacorn. The second is a green unicorn. The third is a pink earth pony. The fourth (His wife) is a blue unicorn and the fifth (Which you'll find out at the end if you haven't read the book which I think you should) is a purple flutter pony. And now: (Oh yeah in case your wondering "Shouldn't it say the beginning?" This like the book itself starts at the end of his life. That's why it says "The end")

The 5 ponies you meet in heaven

Chapter 1: The end:

35 minutes to live:

Eddie is a blue unicorn. He is a maintenance worker on the rides. He makes sure they are up and working and rides them. The other ponies get a thrill to sit with Eddie.

Pony: Sit with me.

Eddie always obliged because he enjoyed the young ponies. He sat next to a freckled young filly. He loved riding the rides. What he didn't like was the teenagers. He'd always had to tell them to watch out. He was crippled and walked with a cane because of a war injury.

Eddie:
Hey. *Walking up to the bumper cars* Get away from there. That's dangerous.

The teenagers never listened. 1 of them jumped the railing and shouted....

Pony:
Hey come and hit me.

Eddie pulled the teenager back into the safe confines behind the line.

Eddie:
I said get back.

20 minutes left to live:

After the teenagers left he saw a young earth pony.

Amy:
Could you please make an animal for me?

Eddie:
Sure.

Eddie loved making animals. He always carried pipe cleaners in his pocket. He would fidget with them. Bending, twisting till....

Eddie:
There a puppy dog.

The little pony smiled. Eddie would always sit on a dock watching the waves roll in and out. He'd cough a few times spitting up what he didn't want to.

10 minutes left to live:

Eddie got a call from 1 of his workers. A ride called "Eddie's big drop" had malfunctioned. He told them instructions over his CB telling them to get all the passengers out. He saw what was happening. 1 of the ride's carts was dangling.

Eddie:
*Over his CB* I think you might have accidentally hit the emergency break. Once you get all the riders off I want you to let the emergency break go.

A worker comes up and is looking around for something.

Pony:
Have you seen my keys anywhere? I was riding that ride when I lost it.

Then it dawned on Eddie. He looked at the cart dangling. He thought....

Eddie:
Damn. That wasn't the emergency break.

He knew what was happening. Apparently his worker dropped his keys and it got into the inner-workings of the ride. The ride had been around awhile and the gears were tearing at the ropes inside.

Eddie:
*Over his CB* Jack listen to me. Whatever you do don't release the emergency break.

The noise of the people screaming drowned him out.

Eddie:
I repeat don't release the emergency break.

But by then it was too late. When they got the last rider off the emergency break was released and with a "Snap" the cart started its death roll toward the onlooking spectators.

Eddie:
Everyone get back. Its dangerous.

Everyone did but Eddie noticed something. There was a little earth pony under the ride looking for her mom. He looked in the little girl's arms and noticed it was the same earth pony he had given the animal to. Instantly he rushed for her and pushed her. The ride was dangling just a few feet above him but he could still see the girl in front of him. He reached out for her and in that instant the last strand of the rope that held it there snapped and landed on Eddie.

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Everyone was looking at the terrible disaster that had happened at the Ponyland theme park. Eddie was dead.

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Chapter 2: The first person Eddie met.

Eddie was in the amusement park. Or was he? He sure looked like he was. He could hear children laughing and people screaming. The leg which was badly injured during the war didn't seem to bug him all that much. His cane which he always kept by his bedside every night because even now he couldn't get up on his own without it was gone. He heard a voice.

Voice:
Come 1 come all. Come see the freak show.

Eddie remembered this. This was his childhood. He had also remembered what happened today.

Eddie:
Did I..... die?

Eddie looked around for the earth pony but saw no sign of her. He thought to himself "Amy? Annie?"

***

Today is Eddie's birthday. He is 7. Eddie is running with all his pals with a new baseball he had gotten for his birthday. 1 of his buddies shouts "Eddie toss it here". He did. His friend didn't catch it.

Eddie:
You told me to throw it.

Pony:
Sorry. I guess I'm just a terrible catcher.

Eddie ran after it and ran across the side show of the theme park. There he saw what were known as the "Freaks". A fat lady, a rainbow pony. Everything. 1 of them looked up and said.

Pony:
What are you doing here boy?

Eddie:
I'm just looking for my ball. *He finds it* Later.

***

Eddie felt much lighter. Like he was a kid again. Almost like he had gone back in time. Then he bumped into a blue pegacorn.

Pegacorn:
Hello Eddie.

Eddie:
How do you know my name? And where am I?

Pegacorn:
I know you because you afffected my life. And where you are is simple. You are in heaven.

Eddie:
So I am dead? Hold it. You said I affected your life? How?

Pegacorn:
I'll get to that in a minute. Eddie here in heaven you will meet 5 ponies whose lives you affected. As did I. You will need to learn a lesson from each of them.

Eddie:
The little earth pony? The 1 that was under the ride? Did I save her? *He just sat there still* Answer me.

Pegacorn:
That question is not mine to answer. What I'm here to do is teach you a valuable lesson.

***

Tomorrow more of this chapter .

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Affected, not Effected.

Sorry, my inner Grammar Nazi got out again.

Good work.

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Fixed it. And no problem these kind of comments help me .

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Eddie:
So I affected your life? How?

Pegacorn:
That day years ago. Remember when you were a young pony? The freaks you saw?

Eddie:
Yeah but why does that......?

Eddie paused. He realized something.

Eddie:
You were 1 of them.

Pegacorn:
That's right except I never made it. The baseball you ran after went right in front of my car.

A vision is seen.

Pegacorn:
For you see when you went after that ball I was just turning the corner and saw you. I veered to try and avoid you.

Eddie:
It was raining that day. I remember. You crashed because of me at that exact moment?

Pegacorn:
No. But I did crash because of you.

Eddie slumped down and tears flowed from his eyes.

Pegacorn:
The reason I'm blue with a bit of green is because I took medicine to help with my heart troubles. When it didn't get better I decided to take more than I needed. And it turned parts of my body green. *He shows where they were* Freak? Maybe. Different? Nah.

Eddie:
I hadn't realized you were killed because of my ignorance.

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The first lesson he learned.

Pegacorn:
Eddie that's not why I'm here. I'm not here to talk of ignorance. I'm here to tell you that all lives are connected. My time here is up. I have to stay here.

Eddie:
But why have you chosen to stay here?

Pegacorn:
Because Eddie I grew up here. After you ran out in front of me I veered and almost struck another car. Then when I veered again I hit a pole and died. Eddie. There are 4 more ponies you will meet on your way to where you will stay. As will everyone.

Eddie nodded and suddenly the theme park faded from view. He tried to call out but couldn't find the strength to.

***

Tuesday:

That night after "Eddie's big drop" crashed into Eddie the park closed. Everyone went home.

Jack:
I should have known. I should have listened more carefully.

Worker:
We're both at fault here Jack.

***

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Chapter 3: The second pony Eddie met:

Eddie saw himself in an open field now. But it wasn't a field. It was a battlefield. He walked ducking hearing gunshots but none whizzed by. Then he came across a helmet and a gun with dogtags. He read the name on it. It was his own. Eddie stepped back. He had remembered this day well. Then from afar came a voice.

Unicorn:
Been a long time Eddie. Real long time.

Eddie:
Are you my second?

Unicorn:
That I am Eddie. You remember me?

Eddie looked up and saw a soldier. It was a face he remembered.

Eddie:
Captain? What are you doing here?

Captain:
Now that's a silly question. What do you think I'm doing here?

Eddie:
To teach me a lesson.

***

Today is Eddie's birthday. He is 25. He had just graduated college and had enlisted in the army. His dad of course disapproved.

Eddie's father:
He should be working. Not going out to some war.

Eddie didn't care. His dad drank all the time. And when he got a chance to he'd beat him.

Eddie:
Dad its for our country.

***

Eddie stood in front of his captain who although had battle scars didn't seem much different than he did in the war.

Eddie:
Captain. I have a question.

Captain:
Go ahead. I'll try and answer it.

Eddie:
That little earth pony. The 1 under the ride. Did I save her?

Captain:
I'm sorry Eddie but I can't answer that. Remember I'm here to teach you a lesson.

Eddie thought to himself "Did I kill you too?" And as if he had heard it the captain looked at him.

Captain:
Remember that day when we were captured by the crazies?

Eddie thought for a moment. He nodded.

Eddie:
All too well sir.

***

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It was when Eddie went to war that they met the crazies. The crazies as they called themselves were with the army they fought against. They spoke no English but loved torturing ponies. 1 time a pony got deathly sick. The soldier that was with them looked down and started cooing and awing at him, mocking him. The next day the pony died of small pox. 1 day Eddie had an idea.

Eddie:
Captain.

Captain:
What's up Eddie?

Eddie pointed to the soldier trying to juggle rocks.

Eddie:
I have a way to distract him to where we can escape. I can juggle.

Captain:
Are you crazy?

Eddie:
Trust me. I can juggle.

The captain agreed to let him do it. Eddie stood up and walked over.

Eddie:
Hey. You. You're doing it wrong. Like this.

Eddie showed the soldier how to do it. Moving his arms back and forth.

Eddie:
Give me 2 rocks.

The soldier obliged. Eddie started to juggle. While he did he started humming a carnival tune. He instructed his buddies in sing-song.

Eddie:
Captain the 1 on the left.

The crazy had gotten another buddy to come and watch in amazement.

Eddie:
1 more rock please.

Thinking nothing of it the soldier obliged and asked crazy 4 to get him 1. He gave it to him.

Eddie:
Guys wait till I count to 3.

He said in sing-song again. The 4 were amused by this show. Then Eddie started counting.

Eddie:
1,2.

Eddie threw a rock up in the air and "Bam" smacked crazy 1 with a rock which he laid over covering his face. Crazy 2 tried to come near him but Eddie tossed another rock and hit him as well. The captain took the shot gun and shot crazy 1 and crazy 2. Crazy 3 tried to go after him but felt a shotgun in the back of his neck. Eddie's buddy shot crazy 3.

Pony:
That's for Damascus.

Crazy 4 tried to make a run for it but Eddie caught the last rock and flung it at him and the soldier's rifle since it had a pointed tip stabbed him and he died.

Captain:
Let's get out of this Hell hole.

They had decided since the camp was abandoned they'd burn it to the ground. So Eddie and his buddies took some gasoline and poured it over the area and set it ablaze with the flamethrowers they had found. They finally cam upon a hut and burned it too. Eddie saw something in the hut. It looked like a little pony.

Captain:
Eddie let's go.

Eddie:
No there's someone in there.

Captain:
Rest assured no one is in there.

Eddie didn't listen. He ran into the hut looking for the girl. Then he heard a shot and felt a pain in his leg. He passed out.

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Eddie looked at his captain.

Captain:
That day you were shot. Do you know who shot you?

Eddie thought for a minute. Then he realized.

Eddie:
It was you. Why captain why?

Captain:
If you stayed in that hut that was burning you would have died.

Eddie:
I see. But did I kill you?

Captain:
No. I was coming back from getting a vehicle when you were burning the last hut. When we got to the gate that's when I was shot. You made it home safely. I didn't.

Eddie:
I'm so sorry captain. So sorry.

***

The second lesson Eddie learned.

Captain:
As you know you need to learn a lesson from me. Eddie my lesson is sacrifice no matter how big or small, is not something to regret. We are only passing something on. Like I did sacrificing myself.

Eddie:
I see.

Captain:
Well my time with you is up. But before you leave take those with you son. They are yours after all.

He was pointing at the helmet and the dogtags. Inside his helmet was a picture of a pony he once loved. Magarietta. And in that instant the battlefield faded from view.

***

Wensday. There were no loved ones that Eddie had. All he had was his coworkers. Eddie's body stayed in the morgue till someone can bury him.

Jack:
We'll have a special ceremony for him.

Morgue worker:
Just get it done soon.

***

Tomorrow Chapter 4 .

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Chapter 4: The third pony Eddie meets:

Eddie sees a building and in it he sees his father. He sees him drinking.

Eddie:
Dad. Dad don't.

A pink earth pony is seen.

Ruby:
He can't hear you Eddie.

Eddied turned around and saw this earth pony.

Ruby:
Hello Eddie.

***

Today is Eddie's birthday. He is 28. He is seen in a hospital bed with minor injuries from the war.

Eddie's mom:
Hey honey.

Eddie's mom came to the hospital with his dad.

Eddie's dad:
He's fine. He'll be back on his feet within a few weeks.

But Eddie didn't. After getting out of the hospital he laid in bed with his injuries. His dad came in and started poking him.

Eddie's dad:
Get out of bed and get a job. Get out of bed and get a job. GET OUT OF BED AND GET A JOB!

That's when Eddie had enough. Eddie sat up and held up his hand. His dad looked at him and turned away.

***

Eddie looked perplexed.

Eddie:
How do you know me?

Ruby:
That theme park? The 1 you worked at?

Eddie:
Ruby Pier theme park? *He gasps* Your Ruby.

Ruby:
Yes. Remember that fire?

Eddie:
Yeah but you died before that happened.

Ruby:
Yes but I know you because of your father. Remember my dad?

Eddie:
Yes. He was dying.

Ruby:
I may not know you but your dad did. Eddie remember when your mom called you?

Eddie:
Yes. She said he died of pneumonia.

Ruby:
Do you know why he died of it?

Eddie:
Because he was a hard worker.

Ruby:
That's not entirely true.

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Ruby:
Eddie that day your father saw a man in his house.

Eddie:
She was sleeping with him?

Ruby:
No. She was trying to stop him. Your dad was furious. He went after him to kill him.

A scene is seen. Where his dad is seen on a wharf.

Ruby:
Your dad ran after the man. Then he heard a splash. The man that had tried to sleep with your mother fell into the water. He struggled to get him to the shore. They were both soaked. Later when he came home they took him to the hospital. Eddie I have something to tell you. When your dad woke up after your mom tried to he got up and went to the window and shouted with his last ounce of strength.

Eddie's dad:
Eddie, Margeret.

Eddie started to cry.

Ruby:
Your dad saved my dad's life. Eddie he regretted never forgiving you for that day.

Eddie:
I get it.

***

The third lesson Eddie learned.

Ruby:
Eddie. Anger is a poison. The lesson I'm here to teach you is forgiveness. Eddie you have something to do and only you can do it.

Eddie nodded and walked into the diner. He walked up to the man who was his dad.

Eddie:
Dad. Dad I know we had some rough times. I know you didn't mean to punish me. Dad I forgive you.

Eddie looked at his dad and when he looked at him he knew he had forgiven his dad. Ruby stood at the door to the diner and motioned him through. Then all at once after he left the diner faded away.

***

Thursday. Eddie's workshop at the theme park had to be cleaned out.

Jack:
Just think. He was a good man.

***

Tomorrow is Chapter 5 .

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Chapter 5: The fourth pony Eddie met in heaven:

Eddie found himself in front of a house. In fact it was his house. Then he heard a familiar voice.

Marietta:
Hi Eddie.

It was his wife Marietta. She's a blue unicorn.

***

Today's Eddie's birthday. He is 36.

Eddie:
Looks like another busy day here at the theme park.

Eddie had worked out in the sun. Then he saw a woman. She was beautiful.

Eddie:
Hi.

Marietta:
Hello.

***

Eddie fell on his face crying.

Eddie:
It can't be you.

Marietta:
It is Eddie. Remember when you went to gamble?

Eddie:
Yes.

Eddie always gambled for the highest money.

***

Marietta:
That day I told you not to gamble our money away. But you wouldn't listen. I yelled at you.

Eddie remembered that day.

Eddie:
I regretted what happened that day.

Marietta:
What happened that day wasn't your fault.

A scene is seen.

Marietta:
That day a bunch of teenagers were throwing bottles down. They didn't know that I was about to go under the underpass. I was in a wreck.

Eddie:
I remember.

Marietta:
You took me to the hospital. But that didn't stop there.

Eddie nodded.

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Marietta:
I did okay with the accident. But then something happened months later.

Eddie:
The cancer.

Marietta:
Yes. You stood with me every day.

***

That day years ago played through Eddie's mind.

Eddie:
Brain cancer?

Marietta:
Yes. It was months later when my life went downhill.

Eddie remembered well.

Eddie:
Yes. We wanted to have a happy life but it was cut short.

***

The fourth lesson Eddie learned:

Marietta:
Eddie love is not lost with death. Remember that. That is my lesson.

Eddie:
I love you Marietta.

And with that She faded away.

***

Friday. The funeral arrangements were made.

Jack:
Tomorrow is the funeral. Everyone that knew him will be there.

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Chapter 6: The fifth pony Eddie met:

Eddie found himself in a room that was completely white. He was looking around for someone then hears a small voice.

Tala: Hi there mister.

Eddie looked up and saw a young flutter pony.

Eddie:
You are?

Tala:
I Tala. You burned me.

Eddie:
What? What do you mean?

Tala:
That day years ago when you set fire to that hut....

Just then Eddie realizes.

Eddie:
There was someone in that hut. I knew it.

Eddie fell on the floor crying.

***

Eddie remembered that day. Like he remembered every day.

Eddie:
I'm sorry. I'm so sorry.

Tala:
I'm 5.

Eddie:
You're 5?

Tala:
No. I'm 5. Your 5.

Eddie's mouth dropped. He held the flutter pony in his hooves and crying.

Tala:
Its okay Eddie.

***

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The fifth lesson he learned:

Tala:
Eddie although you lived your life in denial your life wasn't a waste. Your life was to keep children safe at the pier.

Eddie just had 1 question to ask.

Eddie:
Little girl. I want to know. Did I save that little earth pony? Or did she die? I felt her hoof.

Tala:
That hoof you felt was mine. You saved that little girl.

Eddie sighed.

Tala:
Eddie my name is Tala. You've lived a good life.

Eddie stood there and hugged her.

Tala:
Now Eddie you have a great place to be. And when she comes up here you will have a lesson for her as well.

Eddie nodded.

***

Saturday. Everyone gathered around for his funeral. Everyone was there and gave testimonies about him. And somewhere in that crowd is a green earth pony. A green earth pony Eddie had saved. A green earth pony that when she gets to heaven she will meet Eddie and 4 other ponies that her life affected.

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The end. I hope you enjoyed "The 5 ponies you meet in heaven". Thanks for reading. Next up is a retelling of "Keeping Faith (Ponified)" .