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Post by djlamar2 on Apr 21, 2013 4:45:39 GMT -8
The picture is awesome. I bet "The Rocking Beats" would love to hear their song being sang by the mane 6 .
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Post by powerpup97 on Apr 21, 2013 8:22:40 GMT -8
The picture is awesome. I bet "The Rocking Beats" would love to hear their song being sang by the mane 6 . Ah, so like a cover version?
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Post by Dr. Pain on Apr 27, 2013 10:33:24 GMT -8
Oh I just read it for real this time, your story sucks big time "powerpup". I suggest you take lessons in creativity.
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Post by Al1701 on Apr 29, 2013 11:50:14 GMT -8
It was a cute little story. However, the word choices, especially in the dialogue, seemed clunky and unnatural. I also agree with sunstar that there could have been attention to detail. Still, the idea was good which is what really matters.
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Post by weirdraptor on Apr 29, 2013 12:24:17 GMT -8
It just needs one or two more rewrites and it'll fine.
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Post by djlamar2 on Apr 29, 2013 12:31:20 GMT -8
Yeah. I mean the story is great and if you make it easier to read people will enjoy it. Trust me I know . Details and stuff helps us know who/what your talking about. Like I said before I had the same problem when I started writing my stories. But with the help of people on here I got better at it.
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Post by weirdraptor on Apr 29, 2013 13:17:10 GMT -8
Just don't let it get bogged down in details, though.
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Post by Al1701 on Apr 29, 2013 13:33:24 GMT -8
Yeah, there's a balance. You just have to find it.
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