NumiTuziNeru
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a l?gp?rn?s j?rművem tele van angoln?val.
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1995
Oct 2, 2010 9:28:52 GMT -8
Post by NumiTuziNeru on Oct 2, 2010 9:28:52 GMT -8
Links in with that drawing from yesterday. [oooo]Done for English coursework.
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1995
Oct 2, 2010 12:03:07 GMT -8
Post by Caelum on Oct 2, 2010 12:03:07 GMT -8
DARN YOU AND YOUR LACK OF CONTEXT!!!
Gah! ANNA, I was hoping for some sort of explanation! Stop keeping me in suspense!
I really liked it, though. You did a good job of getting the emotion across. It was...unsettling, really. I mean, you didn't even go and describe the emotion in detail until George explained it to Nemoy; you just said that something felt "wrong". Nothing more than that. What really got the feeling across to me was how George just...tried to avoid it. Tried to think about other things, and pretend it was a normal day.
But it wasn't.
We don't know why, but it *wasn't*.
And that's just...creepy.
*shakes fist* GIVE ME CONTEXT OR GIVE ME DEATH!
ETA: What's up with the title? 1995? Sounds like 1984. XD
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NumiTuziNeru
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a l?gp?rn?s j?rművem tele van angoln?val.
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1995
Oct 3, 2010 4:36:22 GMT -8
Post by NumiTuziNeru on Oct 3, 2010 4:36:22 GMT -8
your compliments fill me with glee.
As for context; I am a cruel trolling master, and won't reveal anything until I feel it proper.
and the title is when this takes place because i am onirigirianlaslsnefmsasdfghjkl cthulhu f'tagn. UNORIGINAL
cannot...type...coherent...moof!
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1995
Oct 26, 2010 6:37:48 GMT -8
Post by Marbletoast on Oct 26, 2010 6:37:48 GMT -8
Auuh, I liked it! I love the way it's just a sliver of something, and we'll never know what--in some cases, that might totally drive me bonkers, but in some cases, like this one, it's actually stronger because the right things have been left to our imagination. Like whether or not anything happened. And what it was. And where they are. Etc. etc. etc.
Spooky, in its way. :]
Since it was for school, you're probably totally done with it--just in case, thought, wanted to point out it would be "were" and not "where."
That was probably my favorite line; in particular the first sentence, and in particular the "bitter edge to the dust." The whole thing paints a great picture of something minute in congruency with the day that can't really be seen and is certainly there.
"rabbiting" is a fabulous verb. XD Perfect description.
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1995
Oct 30, 2010 18:18:47 GMT -8
Post by sunstar on Oct 30, 2010 18:18:47 GMT -8
I read this before. like it! it really gets you thinking!
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NumiTuziNeru
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a l?gp?rn?s j?rművem tele van angoln?val.
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1995
Nov 1, 2010 4:37:12 GMT -8
Post by NumiTuziNeru on Nov 1, 2010 4:37:12 GMT -8
Thank you guys for your lovely comments!
Marble - ...augh how did i not notice [FACEPALM] and yes, it is, isn't it? rabbitrabbitrabbitrabbitrabbit heck, it makes a tune when you type it too.
Okay, because I am feeling nice; it's actually also a test thingie for this comic my friend and I are working on. The two characters mentioned here, George and Nemoy - despite appearances, they're just minor characters that got to be used as guinea pigs. George is the one with who stops her 'the' into a 't' '.
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